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Revising a Literary Essay

You'll find here a variety of suggestions and student writing samples. Use them as a guide for your revision and as examples of writing to strive for -- or avoid.

Note: the samples were extensively revised by the students before submission – this is what your own essay can look like, not how it reads after a single draft.

Organization | Topic Sentences | Argument | Context | Framing a Paragraph/ArgumentEngaging the Reader for Fun and Profit | Transitions | Introductions | Odds and Sods

Organization
Organization guides readers through your essay, transforming the rich -- but jumbled -- array of thoughts and arguments in your head into a logical flow that another person can follow and nod along with as they read.

Look for the following when revising to clarify your organization:

  • Clear thesis and divisions
  • Clear topic sentences with repetition of division word (see below for example)
  • Repetition of division word within paragraph
    • You could also develop list of synonyms connected to division work. For instance, in a paragraph discussing an oppressive society, you could use words like suppress, control, hold back, etc. to keep readers focused on your main point.
  • Break divisions into two paragraphs?

Below you'll find a thesis statement and body paragraphs from a student essay.

Thesis

Edna goes through several stages trying to achieve the independence she desires. The first stage is when she is aware that she is confined, yet accepts it. The second stage is when she tests her confinement. The final stage is when she reaches her ultimate goal -- independence.

Body Paragraphs: note repetition of key words throughout each paragraph.

In the first stage Edna is trapped yet she accepts her place in society. In the 1800's women stayed home busying themselves with household obligations and overseeing the care of their children. Etiquette books of the time tell women the home is "the nucleus around which her affections should revolve, and beyond which she has comparatively small concern" (Seyersted 122). Edna accepts this role as dutiful wife and mother. Mr. Pontieller shares the cultural attitudes of the time and "look[s] at his wife as one looks at a valuable piece of personal property" (4). He does not love her for her individuality; she is not individual in his eyes because she is his possession. He believes she belongs to him, just as the birds in the opening scene "were the property of Madame Lebrun" (1). Edna is caged in Leonce's house just as the birds were in the Lebrun's. When Leonce goes to Klein's, Edna questions whether or not he will be back for dinner. Leonce patted his pocket but did not answer. Edna "understood [it depended on the game] and laughed, nodding goodbye to him" (5). At this point, early in the novel, she does not get upset or angry at his vague answer: she accepts her place as his wife.

Edna finds herself crying one night when her husband leaves home to spread his own wings at the local club, Klein's. While the narrator notes that "Such [crying episodes. . . ] were not uncommon in her married life" (8), she had endured them because she felt there was no way out: being trapped in a marriage was the accepted social norm and she, at this point, preferred internalizing her feelings to acting on them.<<<NOTE HOW THIS REPETITION KEEPS YOU FOCUSED ON THE FIRST DIVISION -- SHE'S REMINDING THE READER THAT SHE'S STILL WORKING WITH THE FIRST DIVISION. She does not have the ability to go where she pleases when she pleases. It is this same kind of entrapment that lead Betty Friedan to write the Feminine Mystique, fifty four years after Chopin wrote The Awakening. Friedan wrote about women who "[felt] empty somehow . . . incomplete" (435). She wrote about how women wanted something for themselves: a life that included more than just living for their husbands. Edna was crying for this same reason. Society expected women to take care of the home in the 1890's, just as it continued to do in the 1960's. And a home can often assume the shape of a prison.

On Grand Isle Edna began to test the limits of her entrapment. <<<MOVES READER FROM FIRST DIVISION TO SECOND DIVISION


Topic Sentences
Topic sentences serve two purposes: 1) they refer back to your divisions, guiding the reader through your essay; and 2) they set up and focus the individual arguments in your paragraphs which will prove the validity of your thesis.

Consider the following thesis and topic sentences:

Thesis
For Davis, the oppression of the working class is supported by religion, the press, and capitalism.

Topic sentence for division one of thesis
With the exception of the Quakers, established religion's blindness to the plight of the working class amounts to a form of oppression.

Topic sentence for division two of thesis
Another mechanism of oppression in "Life" is the press.

Topic sentence for division three of thesis
While religion and the press are responsible for holding back the working class, the force most strongly oppressing the working classes is capitalism.

Note that the topic sentences refer back to both the thesis (oppression of working class) and the divisions (religion, the press, and capitalism). They also each make a declarative statement that needs to be proven.

The topic sentence for division three also functions as a transition from previous paragraphs.

Topic sentences often need to be revised as you develop and extend your argument -- try to break up explanation of each division over several paragraphs (see example in Organization section above).


Context

This serves two purposes: 1) it sets up your point/argument by telling the reader why you're bringing up a particular source or quote, and 2) it gives the reader information to help identify the speaker or place the speaker or example in the given work. For example, a quote from Ragged Dick could be introduced in the following manner:

For Alger, education is part of the larger idea of technological progress, a fixture of the American ideal. Mr. Whitney notes that "it was one of my books that first put me on the track of the invention, which I afterwards made. So you see, my lad, that my studious habits paid me in money" (49).

Context helps readers 1) by making the reader think "Oh yeah, now I remember that part" and 2) by letting readers better understand (and thus agree with) your argument by framing it in a manner so they can understand it. Here, it's clear that the writer wants to accentuate the idea of progress and connect it to technology. The sentence leading up to the quote does this by planting the word "technological" in the reader's mind, which is then reflected in the quote by the word "invention." By setting up your example so clearly, your argument flows logically from your example and explanation leaving the reader with a satisfied "Ahhh" as opposed to a befuddled "huh?"


Framing a Paragraph/Argument

Readers often need additional information after your topic sentence to help them understand the connection between your division and thesis.  This helps you frame or set up the argument for your reader by helping them "see" the point you're going to make in the paragraph. Consider the example below by Tyler:

Thesis: Davis’s negative portrayal of capitalism is still relevant today because it enforces a caste system, encourages people to associate money with morality, and is racially divisive.

One way Davis’ criticism of capitalism’s caste system “Life in the Iron Mills,” is reflected in contemporary America is through the failure of trickle down economics -- also known as supply side theory. Trickle down economics, an economic model made popular by Ronald Reagan, involves cutting taxes for the wealthiest with the belief that the extra money they would receive would trickle down to middle-class and lower-class Americans through job creation, investment, and purchasing.  It also suggested that with a lower tax rate the rich would be more inclined to donate money.  While trickle down economics is a relatively new term, low tax rates for the wealthy is nothing new, and was the norm in 1840s America -- the period “Life” was set in.  Davis illustrates the failures of this economic theory through a conversation between Hugh Wolfe and Doctor May, suggesting that even with Hugh's talents as an artist, he cannot get ahead in life because he was born into poverty.  Doctor May, as a sanctimonious wealthy doctor with wealthy friends and a prestigious position in society, is a natural to preach the trickle down gospel.  When Doctor May notices Hugh’s artistic talent, he exclaims that,

Do you know, boy, you have it in you to be a great sculptor, a great man? do you understand?” (talking down to the capacity of his hearer: it is a way people have with children, and men like Wolfe,)—“to live a better, stronger life than I, or Mr. Kirby here? A man may make himself anything he chooses. God has given you stronger powers than many men,—me, for instance (16).

Here Doctor May points out the obvious: Hugh has talents that should enable him to succeed in society.  But his response points out the fallacy of supply side economics.  As someone from a privileged background, Doctor May sees only opportunity for Hugh -- he doesn't see the cost that it takes to pay for that opportunity.  Hugh, however, understands he needs help and responds, “I know,” quietly. “Will you help me?” (16).  Hugh knows that he needs support from a benefactor to be able to pursue a career in art; his quiet tone suggests he also understands that he will not be getting that funding from Doctor May.  May’s response to Hugh? “Why should one be raised, when myriads are left?—I have not the money, boy”(16). This shows the error in the argument that if social programs are cut the rich will donate more.  Doctor May is very wealthy but will not spare any of his fortune to help Hugh.  If the government does not redistribute wealth through taxation and social programs, it will not be redistributed.  Even when the person who needs charity has a marketable skill that could earn a return on investment, no one wants to help him.  Despite his talents, Hugh never gets to become an artist because he never has the financial backing that he needs; despite his hard work and talent he never escapes poverty because he was born into it. 

Let's start with some basics: note how the topic sentence refers back to the thesis (negative effects of capitalism) and a specific division (caste system).

Then, because readers may be uncertain how "trickle down economics" could connect to literature, he first defines the term, and then explains how it could fit.   And speaking of framing, note how the repetition of words like economic, taxes, wealth, etc. keep the reader focused on the argument.


Argument

Remember that quotes do not explain themselves: it's your job as the writer to make your case by providing the reasoning behind your decision to include a particular quote.

  • Provide context to set up your quotes
  • Look at the following aspects of the quote
    • Figurative language (metaphor, symbol)
    • Characterization (psychological motivations of a character)
      Explain how either of these (or both) support your reading of a quote and/or the point you're making in the paragraph.
  • Focus on explaining how your quote proves your point – talk out the significance of your quote, explaining how and why it proves your point by using
    • Analogies
    • "If . . . then" sentence patterns
    • Historical Connections
    • Contrast or comparison
    • Definitions of word
    • Try using a verb from the following list to shift into argument
agree
argue
believe
charge
claim
comment

conclude
consider
criticize
declare
describe
define

discover
emphasize
explain
feels
illustrate
imply

indicate
reinforce
reveals
shows
suggests
supports

Sample sentences might follow these patterns include

This ____ suggests that _______

They indicate the ____

This emphasis on finding ______ suggests that ___________

Supporting this idea of a capitalism as an oppressive force, the narrator adds __________

The description reinforces the idea that ______

Analogies can be effective strategies for making arguments, as can be seen in the following example.

Having a good home in a good neighborhood is another important part of attaining respectability in Ragged Dick. Where a person lives plays a large part in their class. Today, for instance, if someone says "I live in Beverly Hills," people would get images of sunshine, palm trees, beautiful homes -- in short, money -- in their heads. This would place the person firmly in the category of upper or middle class, a position (if not location) that Dick dreams of attaining. In contrast, if someone says "I live in Camden, NJ," then images of crime, garbage, and decaying project housing come to mind. Naturally, this would lead to a bad impression, and less respect. Obviously, the place one lives has an effect on how the world sees and subsequently treats that person.

This contrast is clearly seen in Ragged Dick. Where Dick and Fosdick lived had a direct effect on the way people treated them, especially if that person did not know them. The scene where Dick accompanies Fosdick to a job interview at a hat store illustrates this. After finding out where they lived, "Roswell curled his lip when this name was pronounced, for Mott Street, as my New York readers know, is in the immediate neighborhood of the Five-Points, and very far from a fashionable locality" (83). Mott Street, where Dick and Fosdick lived, disgusted Roswell because of its proximity to the Five-Points slum, and Roswell looked down on them through guilt by association. Since they did not come from a respectable place, Dick and Fosdick were not going to be given respect by many people. Mott Street and the Five-Points left a taint on its residents. This is why at the end of the story, when they could finally afford it, the boys decide to move to a "nicer quarter of the city" (115). After the move to a more respectable neighborhood, Dick and Fosdick will be given the respect they deserve, instead of being shunned for living in a slum. They are moving up in the world, and must live in a neighborhood that reflects this rise.

Good job here of using an analogy (comparison) to show the importance of location, location, location. And good job of carefully explaining how that analogy plays out in the novel itself.


Engaging the Reader for Fun and Profit

When was the last time you saw the words "fun" and "academic writing" in the same sentence?

I thought so.

And yet the best way to convince a reader that you're point is valid is to make them enjoy what they're reading.

Since getting eyeball on the page -- and keeping them there -- is the goal of any good writing, let's look at how Daniel pulls off this trick. 

Thesis focused on the river symbolizing Huck's moral growth.

A public high school cafeteria presents a sea of problems for teenagers: should they think for themselves, or allow others to think for them.  “Hey, don’t talk to Terry, he’s weird.” or “I heard Margaret eats her own toenails, stay away from her.” Do they listen to others and avoid Terry and Margaret or do they ignore the prevailing social codes and check for themselves if they enjoy their company.  A nineteenth century version of a teenager having to think for himself is portrayed in Huckleberry Finn. At the beginning of the novel, Huck is the teenager who goes along with the crowd and treats a person like an object.  However, once he's on the river with Jim and out of the the cafeteria of white Southern prejudice, he sees a side of an African American that most couldn’t, or simply didn’t care to see. 

Water played a crucial role in this growth and acceptance by Huck of a black person's humanity: Jim let him see that African Americans were not objects -- they were humans with families and real emotions. The  river, a symbol of growth in an agricultural region, supplies the sustenance Huck needs to open his eyes hand help him grow into a better human being.  This is made clear by looking at his views before and after his time on the river.  Early in their journey, before the river has helped Huck grow,  he doesn’t really care about Jim too much and really doesn’t think much of his intelligence. When Huck and Jim get into an argument about language, and Jim seems to be making valid points, Huck just dismisses the argument altogether saying “I see it warn’t no use wasting words - you can’t learn a nigger to argue. So I quit” (179). Huck was dismissing the conversation because he felt that he didn’t really have to respect Jim enough to validate anything he is saying.

Yet there is a positive correlation between time spent on the river Huck's moral growth.  Separated from the racist Southern values by the river,  Huck's feelings toward Jim change as he begins to learn about his life. Jim begins to confide in Huck, telling him that he wishes to gain his freedom so that he may save money to free his family as well. Huck listens and begins to grow, but is held back by lingering feelings of Jim as property. The ultimate test comes when the two are nearing the town of Cairo. Huck encounters men looking for runaway slaves. Huck wants to turn in Jim, but because of the moral growth fostered by the river he cannot.  He tells the men that all that is on the raft is his sick father and family, and makes sure that they know that they are white. He even tells the men that the sickness is contagious so that they will not search. The marks a change in Huck.  He aligns himself with Jim instead of his fellow white man. He is actively choosing to protect Jim instead of doing the easier thing and turning him in and possibly getting some money for him.

As the two spend more time on the river, a  peaceful bond grows between the them. The calmness of the river and the idea of  sharing this small raft with one other person for so long brings them together.  Huck describes the river as a being “perfectly still” saying “Not a sound, anywheres-perfectly still-just like the whole world was asleep” (202).  This feeling of stillness with just one other person can bring anyone together. Huck is no exception. As he and Jim get to talking, a spark of maturity is shown in Huck. They have a conversation about the stars and the sky, and they have differing opinions on whether they were created or if they naturally happened. “Jim he allowed they made, but I allowed they happened” (203). Judging from their earlier argument one would expect this situation to end in same dismissive way.  However this time Huck listens and explains that “Jim said the moon could a laid them ” (203).  Instead of dismissing this with a racist comment, Huck respects his logic nothing “Well, that looked kind of reasonable, so I didn’t say nothing against it.”(203). Though Huck may not have noticed it, his time with Jim was starting to change his way of thinking.       

At the end of the trip down this river of growth,  Huck illustrates the depth of his growth.  Jim was sold by the Duke who could care less about him. But when Huck realizes that he is really Jim’s only friend  and weighs all of the options, he is forced to make a decision. Does he leave Jim to be someone's slave, does he write a letter to Miss Watson, or does he go back and save him? In a testament to the power  of the river, chooses to save Jim -- and is willing to be damned to do it. Making his final decision not to send the letter to Mrs Watson, Huck says to himself “All right, then, I'll go to hell” (262). Huck is showing a conscious change in his personality. He willing to risk his afterlife to save someone one that his fellow Southerners would  not even deem human. This reveals a far different person than the one that won’t even continue a conversation with Jim because he doesn’t respect him enough. The Huck that the reader knew at the beginning of the story, on land before the river, has grown due to his time on the water.  Huck comes out on the other side of the river as a more mature, and understanding person. Though Huck was physically the same, his time on the river has changed his conscience and morals. He is now the kind of teenager who can ignore the cafeteria codes, and sit with who he wants.

For earlier draft, click here.

A few things here.  First, several paragraphs to explain the argument: did you get bored or were you engaged?  I was engaged first because the interesting analogy pulled me in at the beginning: if a modern day Dante would update the Inferno, one of the rings would be a high school cafeteria.  Dan had me hooked.

What kept me hooked was the repetition and slow and steady working through his argument.  Many writers, particularly in their rough drafts, worry that the reader is getting board and rush through their explanations.  Here, Dan carefully lays out his point, constantly going back to and explaining his point.

The result?  A series of paragraphs that you both want to read and clearly argue a point.


Transitions

Let's start with student example from an essay on truth in Tim O'Brien's The Things They Carried.

Another way O'Brien shows truth is what is remembered and imagined is that imagination can be an extremely powerful aspect of a story. O'Brien insists that the unimaginable aspects of a story is the "truth" and the normal aspects are there to make the story believable. Since the war was so reluctant normal ideas are necessary to a story. "Often the crazy stuff is true and the normal stuff isn't, because the normal stuff is necessary to make you believe the truly incredible craziness" (O'Brien 71). In fundamental nature it would be difficult to believe a war story unless there are practical characteristics that go collectively in the story. In truth nothing really has to be true, however, in essence these actions may have happened one time or another during the way, it may not have been O'Brien's platoon but somewhere during the war these instances happened. "Tim O'Brien takes the act of trying to reveal and understand the uncertainties about the war one step further, by looking at it through the imagination" (Kaplan 383). According to O'Brien, these aspects are very well needed to make people feel the real drama of the war.

While the point of this paragraph is kinda/sorta clear, can you follow the writer's argument? I couldn't. The reason? Too many jumps in topic and not enough repetition.

Go With the Flow: How to Transition Between Sentences
Remember that when moving from sentence to sentence, readers must be able to follow your logic. This is accomplished by using transitions. The "This" in the previous sentence illustrates one way of knitting together your thinking/writing – and is an important word to keep in mind. By referring back to "follow your logic," the "This" acts as a bridge, a connection between the two points you're making in your sentences. Another way to make a connection is to use words like "another" (for a list of such words, see below). Connections can also be made by repetition, as in this sentence where I repeat the word "connection" from the previous sentence. Using repetition and transition words keep readers focused on the main topic of your paragraph/idea, which in turn makes it easier for readers to follow your logic.

Synonyms (and sugar on toast)
By now you should be wondering, "well, how do I come up with effective transitions?" Easy. Working one paragraph at a time, develop/brainstorm a list of synonyms or words/phrases associated with the focus of that paragraph (Example? In a paragraph on "coping" you might include words like settle, satisfied, adapt, make adjustments, psychological, change etc.). Keep this list handy as you revise/proofread, and be sure to insert these words throughout the paragraph.


List of Transition Words (from Rules of Thumb)

  • Adding a point: furthermore, besides, finally, in addition to
  • Emphasis: above all, indeed, in fact, in other words, most important
  • Time: then, afterwards, eventually, next, immediately, meanwhile, previously, already, often, since then, now, later, usually
  • Cause and Effect: as a result, therefore, thus
  • Examples: for example, for instance
  • Contrast: but, however, in contrast, instead, nevertheless, on the other hand, though, still, unfortunately
  • Similarity: like, also, likewise, similarly, as

Transitions between paragraphs
Between paragraphs, the best technique is to repeat a word or idea from the previous paragraph. As usual, this is best illustrated with an example. Take a look at the following:

In addition to his character flaws, the end result of Sammy's "heroic" deed makes him a realistic hero.

Without even reading the previous paragraph, you can tell the subject of it was _________. That's the advantage of repetition between paragraphs: you keep reminding the reader of your focus which means you keep reminding the reader of your argument, which means you keep your reader happy.

 


Introductions

If the purpose of an introduction is to engage the reader and provide an overview of your topic, and the purpose of your rough draft was to get your thoughts down, it's probably time to rewrite your introduction. Try the following suggestions -- and remember that in literary essays, you should mention the 1) authors and 2) titles -- with dates -- you'll be covering.

  • analogy
  • contemporary/historical events
  • explain focus of essay
  • personal connection

Conclusions? Avoid merely summing up your main points (sure to invoke the yawn reflex). Try to answer or refer back to your introduction – this creates a kind of "circle" for the reader and results in a very satisfying read.

Student Samples

Throughout America's history women have not been treated equally compared to men. Men have always had freedoms handed to them. Women have had to fight for their freedoms. They fought for the right to vote, and the right to own property. Men have always had the independence to do as they desired without the interference of social restrictions. Women have not been as fortunate. Even today, women are restrained by society. Women are not compensated equally for the same position their male counterpart holds. Men still maintain the majority of the executive level positions.

This restraint was much worse for Edna Pontieller, a character in Kate Chopin's 1899 novel, The Awakening. Edna desires freedom and individuality. These desires motivate her to achieve independence. She goes through several stages trying to achieve this independence. The first stage is when she is aware that she is confined, yet accepts it. The second stage is when she tests her confinement. The final stage is when she reaches her ultimate goal -- independence.

This intro could use more work -- the list of ideas at the beginning is rather bland and generalized. More specific examples would really help.

Many people believe they are an island, dependent on no one, living without regard to others. But as sociologist Diana Kendall notes, "Many of our individual experiences may be largely beyond our own control. They are determined by society as a whole"(4). This was particularly true in the nineteenth century; Charles Wagner author of several popular self-help books in the late 1890s, noted that "The first requisite to the realization of the object of life is obedience" (43). The implication here is those who do not accept their yoke -- those who act as if they are on an island -- will not succeed. Unfortunately, some rebel so strongly against the restrictions of society that survival is not possible. Such a person is Edna Pontieller, the protagonist of Kate Chopin's 1899 novel The Awakening. In this work, Chopin illustrates how the social restraints of a prevailing conservative ideology degrades Edna's sense of hopeful defiance by straining her relationships, and mental and spiritual health.

Much better here. The background information sets up the thesis and provides the specificity that grabs the reader's attention.

Tyler's multi paragraph intro for his essay on "Life in the Iron Mills" shows that sometimes you need to stretch out to set up your argument.

Not So Free Markets: Anti-Capitalist Views in “Life in the Iron Mills”

America.  Capitalism.  Freedom.  These are words that conservatives love to invoke when they are running for office.  They would like the public to believe that all three of these words are synonymous; however, freedom and capitalism are two opposing concepts.  To guarantee freedom would be to ensure that all citizens can do what they want and think what they want without restraint.  Financial insecurity is a restraint, and a truly free society would work hard to try and eliminate this restraint.  The conflict this presents is that financial insecurity is important to capitalism.  Capitalists believe that financial insecurity encourages the poor to work harder; because of this, they push policies that benefit the wealthiest Americans and cut programs designed to help the poorest. For this reason, capitalism only guarantees freedom to the wealthiest in society.  These are the people who own all the land, businesses, and stocks.  They run investment firms and help their friends get into office through superpacs.  They are able to make all the decisions because they control both major political parties and they own the media. 

This is obviously a bleak portrait of America, and if every citizen saw America this way, capitalism would not be equated to the American Dream – the ideal that with a little hard work and dedication people can rise out of the class they were born in.  The problem is that most Americans cannot see this stark reality because of the propagandized myths that have come to define America.  The myth of the American Dream has been engraved by authors like Horatio Alger.  Published in 1868, Alger’s Ragged Dick is one of the earliest portrayals of this propagandized American capitalist system; he displays the exception as the norm.  Ragged Dick tries to convince its audience that a poor shoe shiner could become a sophisticated member of society with a little hard work and dedication. 

While writers like Alger wrote about a fantasized version of capitalism and America, there were also writers who portrayed capitalism more accurately during the same time period.  One such writer was Rebbecca Harding Davis in her short story “Life in the Iron Mills.”  In this story, her main character struggles to escape poverty in mid-1800 West Virginia. Yet even though Davis’s story is set in antebellum West Virginia, her story it speaks to contemporary views of economics.  Davis’s portrayal of capitalism is still relevant today because it shows how it enforces a caste system, encourages people to associate money with morality, and is racially divisive. 

I love the one word sentences that open this introduction and the explanation/set up of his argument.  While he makes several generalizations that need sourcing, his overall voice pulls the reader in -- and that's the goal of an intro.


Odds and Sods

And finally, remember that revision involves focusing on the reader. Successful revision means continually asking "how can I make this clearer?" "Will my reader understand me here? "What do I need to change to clarify my argument?" I'm looking forward to reading your answers to these questions.

Top suggestion for successful revision? Work on your essay one paragraph at a time. In other words, do not try to sit down and revise the entire essay in one sitting. Break your revision down into sections so it will seem less onerous and so you can continually come to your work with fresh eyes. For an overview of the kind of reading necessary for revision, see Donald Murray's The Maker's Eye. You can also review the suggestions on the Course Documents page.

Proofreading
Often confused with revision, this is the careful attention to words and punctuation that separates the profound from the pedestrian (hint: go for profound). After you've completed your revision -- which focused on adding ideas, deleting wayward thoughts, adding explanations -- it's time to focus on the words: the way that you'll communicate with the reader.

Top two suggestions for proofreading? 1) slowly read your work out loud: if you sprain your tongue on a particular phrase, that's a sign it needs work, and 2) repeat #1 . . . repeatedly. For an interesting take on the kind of attention necessary when proofreading, see Pico Iyer's In Praise of the Humble Comma.

 

© 2008 David Bordelon