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General Revision Suggestions Overview on Revision Adapted from The Concise Guide to Writing
The goal of revision is simple: making your essay more accurately
express what is on your mind to another person. You'll find that even
though you've spent hours planning and writing a first (or second, or
third) draft, your essay will still need work if your goal is (as it
should be) to fully and vividly communicate your ideas. You have two
choices: 1) give up and watch reruns of Myth Busters, or 2)
roll up your sleeves and get to work. Surprisingly, experienced writers
know that good writing takes many drafts, and thus know that the real
writing doesn't begin until the first drafts are out of the way. Only
after they get their thinking down on paper can they delete, move,
rephrase, and add material in order to say what they want to say more
clearly and thoughtfully. While a first draft (or zero draft) is a time for low expectations, when you shift from drafting to revision, you move into a different zone: you're now in "high expectations" time. Don't be satisfied with what's written: keep pushing yourself to make it more interesting and more specific. In fact, I've found that the students who are sure that "this is the best paper I've written" often need more work on their essays, while the students who aren't fully satisfied with their work often do well. What these latter students have is a positive attitude towards writing. They realize that essays aren't "born" (i.e. written in one or two sittings), but are "made" by attention to details. This positive attitude is crucial when you look in despair at your first draft and think "Uh oh!" Don't just give up if you think most of your essay isn't any good (most writers feel this way).
Specific Revision Ideas
Use "Real Life" Comparisons When making connections/explanations from the example to your argument, try comparing the quote/situation to "real life" – how do people, in general, react to such events/statements. Example? Okay. In an essay on Sammy (of "A&P" fame) as an everyday hero, you can compare his character flaws with the apparent absence of such flaws in a stereotypical hero like a New York firefighter (of course, you would note how the first person point of view helps reveal Sammy's flaws). Since ignorant readers don't usually grasp your explanation the first time, you need to compensate by explaining how your quote supports your argument from several different perspectives. Keep in mind that this – the explanation – is the basis of your argument, and the quality of your argument, not the work you put into the essay, or your great examples, is what determines your grade. Revision Ideas: Odds and Ends Introductions Conclusion
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