Online Peer Review Instructions
Your goal is simple: answer the questions from the Peer Review (see below) for each of the people in your group.
Follow the instructions below
By Friday 11/11
- Copy and paste (again, copy and paste -- no attachments) your essay to me and to the students in your "box." In the subject box write "Essay 3 for peer review." I will not comment on this draft -- but your classmates will.
By Monday 11/14
- Complete a peer review (see below for questions) for the essays you've received and copy and paste it back to the student -- and . . . to me.
151-29 Listing
Robert Anderson, Kelly Barone, Kevin Boyle |
Austin Deane, Shannon Golden, Kelly Graham |
Alyshia, Kyle, Michelle LeFaucheur, Meghan McCombs, Sean Templeton |
Steven Meyer, Brianna Parrish, Caitlin Rillo |
Justin Rodman, Franklyn Rodriguez, Christopher Sypniewski |
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151-40 Listing
Oleksandra Barnovska, Michael Carlson, Alexis Cromlish, Deborah Welby |
Brian Fischer, Cody Hoschek, Krystal Lasko |
Johnson Oguntade, Camden Ostrander, Lennise Otero-Basden |
Dominic Petrocelli, Anthony Pruchnik, Heather Reid, Jenna Scialabba |
Hannah Scheulfer, Thomas Schulte, James Schwartz |
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Peer Review for Essay #3 (Argumentative)
Remember that you goal isn't to answer "yes" to every question: it's to make suggestions. Try using "Consider ____" or "Try ______" to preface your comments.
- Introduction
- What changes could be made to help the intro grab your attention?
- Does it provide enough background information to set up the issue? Do you understand what will be evaluated? Should two or more paragraphs needed to provide more information?
- Is the background material cited?
- Thesis: copy out what you think is the thesis and division statement.
- Comment on its clarity
- can you tell the position of the writer?
- Are the divisions really distinct and separate, or could two of them be combined into one?
- For each paragraph complete the following:
- Topic Sentences
· Does the topic sentence set up an argument based on the divisions?
· Is there a focus word which connects back to the division in the first sentence (or so)?
- Evidence/Details
· Where can more specific information from the readings to connect the division to the civic stance be included?
- Explanation
· The #1 item that usually needs work is the explanation: where can a more specific explanation on why ____ (topic of paragraph) helps or hurts America be added?
· What kind of argumentative language is used to explain the logic behind the argument? Do they use any of the following:
The problem with ___ is that _____.
This ______ helps/hurts society/America/people because __________
The advantage/s/disadvantage/s of ________ is/are _______.
If ___ continues, then ____.
Where could they include such language?
· Where can more explanations – analogies to other events, reference to economic, social, political, moral arguments, etc. (see I&C 73) – be included? Remember that it is the explanation, not the evidence, that shows your reasoning.
· Ask yourself "How does this division prove the argument in the essay?" or "Why is this division important to the thesis?"
- Counterargument and Rebuttal
· Could these be worked more smoothly into the essay?
· Does it need to be treated separately at the end, or could it be included in more detail throughout essay?
· Is the counter argument a specific argument or is it general?
· Is it cited?
- Conclusion
Avoid merely repeating the thesis.
· Does the writer refer back to the introduction?
· Does the writer address the question "What's it all mean?"?